You are going to think that how and who is Piti Alien.
Piti Alien is my teady bear, he has three eyes, one mouth, two arms, six fingers
two pointed ears, and one special antenna.
My brother, cousins and sister called willy for annoy me, when they seed that I hit them.
But sometimes I hit them with Piti Alien, I demage a lot them. Because I´m very angry.
Here I´m going to show you a photo of three Piti Aliens of Toy Story film:
2 comments:
This is pretty funny, but I don't think you should be hitting your family members over your teddy. I like the story very much. Here are only a few things I would change. Please look it over, and I hope it helps you improve in your writing!
"You might be wondering who Piti Alien is.
Piti Alien is my teddy bear. He has three eyes, a mouth, two arms, six fingers, two pointed ears and a special antenna.
My brother, cousins and sister call him willy to annoy me. When they call him that, I hit them. Sometimes I hit them with Piti Alien. I hurt them a lot. Here is a photo of three Piti Aliens from the Toy Story film:"
It's funny, and I know you love Piti Alien because you are always talking about them when we talk about films or Toy Story.
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